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下課時間

19冬前
學校紅牆仔邊
彼隻蹉跎馬仔e懸度
我已經講未出來
干擔會記
偎晝e下課時間
我坐值頂懸
目睭看著牆仔頭
一抱 白色e草花

我看著牆仔外面
兩個查某人
頭巾包咧
值彼條新舖e點仔膠路裡
耙粟仔

日光蒸起來
遐 一壟一壟e
金黃色e粟仔
親像流動e熱湧 滾絞
阿彼兩個矮篤矮篤e人影
嘛漸漸融值內底

其中一個
是我e媽媽

槓鐘e時
伊遠遠對我揚手
喊我入去教室
上課

2001.11.16


A Breaktime
/ Tiongsiong Oo

I just can not tell
how tall the amusement horse was
19 years ago
near the red wall of the school.
I just remember
at some breaktime near afternoon
I rode it on
and saw the white herbaceous flowers
on the top of the wall.

I saw two women
in headscarves
outside the wall
and harrowed the rice grains
on the new-built asphalt road.

The sunlight steamed
and those ridges
of golden grains
fluctuated like spreading hot waves
gradually melting
the two short silhouettes away

one of which
was my mother’s

When the bell rang
she waved her hand to me at a distance
and urged me back to the classroom
for class

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顏雪花Catherine Yen在12:22am對2010 一月 10的評論
It's beautifully delivered a mother's love, especially the last two paragraphs depicting a mom's gaze with kindness and caring.
胡長松在2:17am對2010 一月 10的評論
Thank You and happy that you like it!!
王立信在8:51pm對2010 一月 11的評論
其中一個
是我e媽媽

槓鐘e時
伊遠遠對我揚手
喊我入去教室
上課
誠鮮明兮感覺.親像拄則旦仔佇目睭前兮形影爾.
熟悉熟悉面熟面熟兮時空含環境兮氛圍.家己敢若佇彼內底呢。
讀著即首詩袂輸去讀著郭文玄兄彼首「曝棉被」彼款親切及貼心
暗暗仔匿
偷偷仔瞻(siam1)
瞻看日頭跤,大人e世間

涼涼,掩稠e
棉被下跤
囡仔時e一絲絲仔幻想
佇遐
楞楞(gang7 X)仔想

勻勻仔飛 

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